User blog:BCEngine/Me needs a bit of a favor of you lovely people :)

Ello! It's BC! I need some constructive criticism.

Anyways, I'm planning to write a book. I'm calling it "Faith and Prayer." It's about a girl who moved from Saudi Arabia to America from her messed-up father. It's her first day in school, people don't say anything but just stare at her, and, of course, the mean croud comes along, starts mocking her, making fun of her clothing, and (oh good lord I can't beleive I thought of this) Making fun of her race.

So she feels like a million pounds drops on her, so she changes herself into the girl that everybody likes, soon she's accepted into the "it" crowd, where she joins them in their quest to target others and make fun of them. Soon, one person teased by the group seems to always keep her eye on the girl.

Soon, the girl goes to a party and nearly has something she never wanted until that one person they mocked comes in, and saves the girl from potential doom.

Soon they become friends and the girl learns a lot from the person and starts to feel loved. Then just to add to her trauma her friend suddenly is diagnosed with lukemia and is suffering from it. Then it turns out their land is going to be sold if they don't get money in to these people by December. Soon, the girl starts many different money-raising things, as she struggles to keep her friend alive.

So what do you guys think? I want to publish this book and I might need a kick-start in the head. It's not as rushed as it sounds though. Post what you think in the comments! Thanks!